ALOHA !!

Outline
Topic Sentence: The “aloha spirit” of Hawaii’s people is well known.

Topic : The “aloha spirit” of Hawaii’s people

Controlling idea : is well known

1.   Major supporting sentence : People in Hawaii are well known with  their aloha spirit

·       Minor supporting sentence : They often say “hello” or “God bless you” with the visitor even they don’t know each other

2. Major supporting sentence : They put in the visitor’s neck with the flower bunch

·       It’s made from beautiful flower around that place

3. Major supporting sentence: They introduce their traditional dance

·       They ask visitor to join with them

·       While introduce they dance, they share their joyfulness to the visitor

4. Major supporting sentence : People in Hawaii love to share joyful energy of life as the meaning of Aloha itself

Concluding sentence : This unique  tradition of sharing friendliness make Hawaii’s people famous in the world.

 My first draft

The “Aloha spirit” of Hawaii’s people is well known. It is about sharing friendliness to visitor. They are friendly to the visitor. They often say “hello” or “god bless you to the visitor. In so many places, they often put in visitor’s neck with the flower bunch. It is made from flower around there. They introduce their traditional dance, with the visitor. Of course they ask visitor people to join with them. Sharing friendliness is very common and well known in Hawaii, because it is bring god sense to them. This unique tradition makes people in Hawaii very famous with their spirit, which is called “aloha spirit “.

My final writing

The “Aloha spirit” of Hawaii’s people is well known. It is about sharing friendliness to visitor. They are friendly to the visitor. They often say “hello” or “god bless you to the visitor. They often put in visitor’s neck with the flower bunch which is made from flower around there. They introduce their traditional dance, and ask them to join the dancing, visitor people to join with them. During this togetherness, they share joyful as what the meaning of aloha itself "the joyful (oha) sharing (alo) of life energy (ha). This unique tradition makes people in Hawaii very famous in the world with their “aloha spirit”

Outline

Botanical garden

        People, who ever they are no matter their age they love to enjoy their holiday in Botanical Garden (topic sentence)

     A.  See

1. People can see so many plants in botanical garden (major sentence)

a)   Grassy area

b)  Tree, for example bamboo tree, maple tree, willow, fir, palm,

c)   There are also so many flowers, for example: Rose, daisy, orchid, primrose, cactus, poppy, buttercup.

2. People also can see the seller in the front side of the garden.

a)   There are so many food seller for example : fried rice, meat ball, soup

b)  There are also beverage seller, such as : cold drink, warm drink, and also soft drink

 B. Do

       1. People can spent their holiday by picnic with the family

a)   While picnic, the children can play football

b)  Also we can take photo

c)   We also can enjoy the meal that we bring

d)  Walking around to see the panorama and plant collection

e)   Playing some game.

      C. Taste

        1. While enjoy the holiday here, we also can taste some food.

a)   Taste the food while picnic

b)  Taste the freshness of fruit that the garden’s has, such as, strawberry, orange, watermelon, mango

c)   We can taste the vegetables, likes : carrot, lettuce, cucumber, broccoli.

       D. Feel

         1. People can feel comfortable during the holiday here

a)   Cool situation

b)  Fresh air

c)   Calm and relax situation

d)  Great scenery

        E.   Hear

         1.  People become comfortable because they also heard voices which  bring happiness 

a)   Bird’s voice

b)  Kids who playing around

 To spend holiday in Botanical Garden is a pleasant. No matter their age, young or old, kids or adult they still have a happy time in Botanical Garden.

"Free Hug" Care, Love and peace

(Final Result)

There was a man holding a banner and walking around public area and he would do a “free hug” campaign to show how a humanity is important nowadays. We should realized as a human, we cannot live alone. All of us need caring, loving each other no matter who ever they are. He want people around that place join the campaign. By giving a hug sincerely and it continue to other people.

At first everybody was careless with what the man did. People didn’t want to follow the campaign. They just look at the man strangely. Even though he didn’t get any response, he keep walking and tried to catch people’s attention. He didn’t give up and still continue his mission.

After that, a wan was looking at him. She approached the man and see what he brought. She then give him a hug sincerely. She hug the man which mean she want to join the campaign. After she give him a hug, they successfully catch people’s attention. Everybody join the campaign and give free hug each other. After everybody look so happy to do the campaign, a disappointment was happen to him. Police banned the campaign. It is because he disturb another pedestrian. 

He didn’t want to stop the campaign. He continue the campaign by giving a proof that the campaign is important. He invite people to give him a signature. Then, people give their signature one by one. Unbelievable, he got 10.000 signature. The signature is the proof, a proof that people need love, care peace to all people from the entire world.

Police couldn’t stop the campaign. Everybody look so happy during the campaign. They feel love, peace, care and togetherness can built just by doing a simple thing. Finally I want to give my point of view for the campaign. I feel this campaign bring great moral value. So starting from now on, let us be confident by giving simple act to make our life better. Will you do the campaign with the people around you?

My journey, My Lovely story

This is my story about my lovely holiday. I love holiday very much, of course everyone too. I s usually spent my holiday time to go to my favorite places. My favorite place is that place which has beautiful panorama. As I  what show in the picture, I was in Bedugul- Bali. This is my favorite place. It is because there are so many beautiful scenery in every corner in  that place. Let us say, grassy area that make us feel so refresh.There are also so many colorful flower which so beautiful and nice to take photo with that.The other thing that make me amaze is that the fresh air and always make me fresh and feeling calm. There are also a large lake which the water is so cold make us feel breezing like touch an ice.
This is my story of my holiday, so where will you go to spend your holiday time ?

This is my outline

Name   : Kadek Angga AndrianiNIM    : 1212021144Class    : 3B 

This man holds a “free hugs” sign and walked in the middle of the street. He was wearing a trouser and a coat.  For a man, his hair is too long. He also has a thick mustache and beard. It’s makes people didn't want to get closer to him. People there only looked at him, sometimes they smile and took his picture. At first, I think the man with the sign in his hand was so frustrated and little bit hopeless. We can see it from the black and white screen at the beginning. People were passing by, but this man never stop to try, whenever no one respect to him.When he was being careless, an old woman approached him and asked about what he did. The man spontaneously kneeling and offering a hug with his stretched out arms. The old woman immediately greeted with a hug. The grandmother successfully attracts the attention of other people to this man. And then, so many people want to cuddle with this man, even a guy with a serious face did the same.Because of this man, the street became a little bit crowded. Because, everybody stopped for a while to see this campaign. Then, the policeman came and banned this campaign directly. Because the policeman thought that the campaign disturbed another pedestrian at that place. The man explained it patiently to the policeman. He never gave up and continued his campaign with different way. He offered a hug to everybody and asked that participants to give their signature as the petition of this campaign. People became more respect to this man and helped this man with their pleasure. Unbelievable, he got 10,000 signatures from the participants.At the end of the video, everybody looked very happy. They embraced to each other, include the policeman. The policeman can’t do anything, because this campaign already supported by 10,000 people and it’s not such kind of criminalization.I think, the main point of this video is how we respect each other and love our environment. Although it looks very simple, actually hugs have many benefits, both for health or relationship between human beings. Just because a hug, people in the video became more respect to each other. Caring is the first step of creating peace and happiness. So, we have to reduce our individual attitude to produce more smiles in this world.(written by : Taharyanti)         

 This is the outline of what Yanti’s Posted, I examine the sentence starting from topic sentence, and the continue with major sentence, there are also some minor sentence that I found but not all major sentence has minor sentence, maybe it’s not really needed :

 1.      This man holds “free hugs” sign and walking in the middle of the street(Topic sentence)
 2.      Describe the man’s appearance :
ü  Wearing trouser and coat
ü  Long hair
ü  thick mustache and beard3.      No one care with him
ü  Just give him smile or take pictures
ü  He continue walking, even tough no one respect him
 4.      He become little bit frustrated
 5.      The man didn't give up
 6.      Old woman approach him, and give him a hug
 7.      The man offering a hug with his stretched out arms

 8.      This situation was attract other people to do the same

 9.      The street become crowded
ü  Everybody were stopped and give him huge
10.  The police banned the campaign
11.  He explain to the police patiently
12.  He keep going to do the campaign
13.  He ask people to participate by give him a signature
14.  He got 10.000 signature
15.  Main point of the campaign
ü  Everybody looks happy
ü  It is important to respect each other and love our environment
ü  Care and respect is the source of peace and happiness
   

I want to design it perfectly

I love cooking very much since I was child. I always make my favorite food by myself in my lovely kitchen. I always expect I will have my own kitchen when I have my married in the future. By cooking I can feel enjoy and forget all of my stress. When I enter my kitchen in my house, I see the things around it. Then I decided that I will design my own kitchen differently. I will make it simple, nice and bring happy story when I spend my time there. From the center of the room, I will put a table with four chairs, and I prefer to choose white color because I love white. This is for having meal together with my family. Then in the corner, I will design as dishwasher with simple faucet. Next to the dishwasher I will put sink to wash dirt cooking utensils.  Beside of the sink, near the window I will put the stove for cook the food. Next, under the stove there will be an oven. Then, beside the oven, there will be drawer to put my cooking utensils there. Next, I will put my refrigerator beside the drawer to keep my food still in good condition.  On the top of the stove next to the refrigerator there will cabinet, to put my cup, sugar, coffee and tea.

And this is my lovely kitchen design, simple, nice and Happy cooking! 

My Classmate

Ni Nyoman Ayu Padmitri is my classmate in my department. Everybody call her Padmitri. She comes from Bontihing, a village located in the east of north Bali. Now she lived on Pulau Lombok Street. She was born on October 13 1993 in Bontihing village. Her nationality is Indonesia. She can speak Balinese, bahasa Indonesia and English. She was graduate from SMK N 1 Singaraja. When she was as student, her favorite subject is English. Padmitri’s hobby is travelling. She usually watches TV and reads book in her free time. After She graduate from university, she will be a teacher.

Padmitri is a unique girl. Padmitri has same face with her 2 sister. They are twin, that’s why, when I come to her boarding house, I confused whether it was Padmitri or her sister. Padmitri is a diligent woman. Also she is cheerful and clever. She loves to study English every day, especially about grammar. We usually spend our time together in the class or outside. When we go out, we usually having meal together. Her favorite food is meatball. For me Padmitri is a great friend. She always help me when I need her. She also understands and listens all of my story and my problem. I love to be padmitri’s friend. Hopefully we can always together and have good relationship.

"FREE HUG" Care, Loe, Peace (final result)

There was a man holding a banner and walking around public area and he would do a “free hug” campaign to show how a humanity is important nowadays. We should realized as a human, we cannot live alone. All of us need caring, loving each other no matter who ever they are. He want people around that place join the campaign. By giving a hug sincerely and it continue to other people.

At first everybody was careless with what the man did. People didn’t want to follow the campaign. They just look at the man strangely. Even though he didn’t get any response, he keep walking and tried to catch people’s attention. He didn’t give up and still continue his mission.

After that, a wan was looking at him. She approached the man and see what he brought. She then give him a hug sincerely. She hug the man which mean she want to join the campaign. After she give him a hug, they successfully catch people’s attention. Everybody join the campaign and give free hug each other. After everybody look so happy to do the campaign, a disappointment was happen to him. Police banned the campaign. It is because he disturb another pedestrian.  

He didn’t want to stop the campaign. He continue the campaign by giving a proof that the campaign is important. He invite people to give him a signature. Then, people give their signature one by one. Unbelievable, he got 10.000 signature. The signature is the proof, a proof that people need love, care peace to all people from the entire world.

Police couldn’t stop the campaign. Everybody look so happy during the campaign. They feel love, peace, care and togetherness can built just by doing a simple thing. Finally I want to give my point of view for the campaign. I feel this campaign bring great moral value. So starting from now on, let us be confident by giving simple act to make our life better. Will you do the campaign with the people around you?