There was a man holding a banner and walking
around public area and he would do a “free hug” campaign to show how a humanity
is important nowadays. We should realized as a human, we cannot live alone. All
of us need caring, loving each other no matter who ever they are. He want
people around that place join the campaign. By giving a hug sincerely and it
continue to other people.
At first everybody was careless with what the
man did. People didn’t want to follow the campaign. They just look at the man
strangely. Even though he didn’t get any response, he keep walking and tried to
catch people’s attention. He didn’t give up and still continue his mission.
After that, a wan was looking at him. She
approached the man and see what he brought. She then give him a hug sincerely.
She hug the man which mean she want to join the campaign. After she give him a
hug, they successfully catch people’s attention. Everybody join the campaign
and give free hug each other. After everybody look so happy to do the campaign,
a disappointment was happen to him. Police banned the campaign. It is because
he disturb another pedestrian.
He didn’t want to stop the campaign. He continue
the campaign by giving a proof that the campaign is important. He invite people
to give him a signature. Then, people give their signature one by one. Unbelievable,
he got 10.000 signature. The signature is the proof, a proof that people need
love, care peace to all people from the entire world.
Police couldn’t stop the campaign. Everybody
look so happy during the campaign. They feel love, peace, care and togetherness
can built just by doing a simple thing. Finally I want to give my point of view
for the campaign. I feel this campaign bring great moral value. So starting
from now on, let us be confident by giving simple act to make our life better.
Will you do the campaign with the people around you?
Grammar : Your grammars are quite good. But, you have to consider to put a suffix –s in some of your word. I found you that you miss it in some of your sentences.
BalasHapusVocabulary : You need to be very careful and check your work again before post it in your blog. You miss some alphabet of the right spelling of those words. It would deliver a different meaning when the readers read your article. You have to put your attention more in Microsoft Word’s system of checking spelling. You can count on it when you write something and forget about some spelling of those words.
Mechanic : Your paragraph’s structure is good. You use some expression or common word in time signals. But, I found just a mistake in your paragraph. It’s about “at the end”, but you put “finally” also in the following paragraph. I think, both of them supposed to be placed in the last or concluding paragraph. And, one thing that is really simple, but have a big meaning is about the pull stop (.) and comma (,). You are forget to put a full stop (.) after that sentence, but you continue the following sentence with a capital alphabet in the first word.
you have so many ideas to write, and this post is really good actually.